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Roses Are Not Always Red by ~caramoofin:iconcaramoofin:

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Roses are not always red;
You like them heavy with scent
With fragrance that rises like heat in the air
Heady, intoxicating, sweet.

Pink-petaled or white as new paper;
The colour of old parchment, yellowing and pale
Dusky peach, deep orange,
Burning like the evening sky.

They climb languidly around your door,
Draping lazily in the summer heat
As if bored, they grow in sculpted bushes along your path
Beautiful and distant.

You like them rich and expensive, with petals like silk
But you like them just as much poor and sweet and bright
Folded into themselves, shy with youth,
Or open wide in the full blossom of their prime.
©2009-2010 ~caramoofin
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Author's Comments

100 themes challenge #31: flowers.

Because I ought to practice my poetry. And also because red roses are overrated.

Um... this was supposed to rhyme. Then it sort of didn't. I should go back and edit it, but I sort of like it like this, to be honest.

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`poisonedrose Jun 15, 2009, 2:20:19 PM
I think this piece sounds better without the rhyme :)

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~caramoofin Jun 16, 2009, 12:57:36 AM
Thank you very much :) I'm quite fond of it as is, too.

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=3wyl Jun 16, 2009, 7:02:54 AM
Mm-hmm, I second poisonedrose. To make it rhyme is to confirm that roses are not overrated when perhaps they are?

Still, I really like the imagery and how you've described it. The atmosphere is brilliant. :)

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~caramoofin Jun 16, 2009, 7:25:07 AM
Thank you very much! :D

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*vidramidra Jun 16, 2009, 8:48:11 AM
I don't think it needs rhymes. It's just perfect this way! :) The last verse is my favourite ^^

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~caramoofin Jun 16, 2009, 10:46:59 AM
Thank you! :D

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~moonshinerose Jun 21, 2009, 6:45:31 AM
Wow, that's so amazing. I love it! Beautiful! I especially like the first verse.

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~caramoofin Jun 21, 2009, 9:03:15 AM
Thank you! :D Glad you like it.

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~Band-E-Coot Dec 2, 2009, 7:31:49 PM
This is awesome and very discriptive! :D
I wish I had poetic talent, but I can only write short stories

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